I have been mark explain writing.

WALT use rubric to mark a piece of writing.

Success criteria: I will use the rubric to mark then write why I gave it to that point.

I will add a total of point  and gave it a level.

In our  Tautoro School  we have so many new students who have enrolled  in our school. Because of the new enrollments every time we have a  powhiri or assembly we always get squashed, and we feel really uncomfortable. So the facility that is needed in Tautoro School  is a new hall. Why do we need a hall? First a  hall is needed by Tautoro School because when we have new students enrolling in our school, every new child needs  a powhiri. There are more students enrolling into our school every week and we are feeling really squashed in our small library.  If we had a hall our manuhiri would feel more comfortable and they would be able to shake everybody's hands without pushing past students and then they would feel very welcomed, comfortable and feel more relaxed.  Secondly: if we had a community hall we would also be able to play sports inside.   If it was raining or if it became too hot. Then we wouldn't be missing out on our fitness and fitness  makes you feel good and it exercises your brain. And this would help students to concentrate more in class. Another reason why we need a hall is so that we could get a kitchen built in the hall then we would be able to have technology at our school instead of travelling to town to use another school's kitchen.  We would be able to learn how to cook and bake and then we would be able to help our whanau cook and bake at home. Last of all we need  a hall because our community would be able to use the hall in the weekend which will bring  all our local communities together for meetings or gala days. In conclusion, I strongly believe we need a community hall at our school because our  Tautoro school community is growing every week with new students enrolling into our school. It is important  that we have a new hall so that we won't be squashed and then we would feel comfortable and then we would listen better because we would all feel relaxed. If we don't have a hall we will always feel squashed and we will not have enough room in our teeny library for new students.

                                 Score     Reasons why you have given this mark

Ideas	5	Because it has lots of ideas that connects.
Structure Language	4	She has all of her structure.
Organisation	4	She put her ideas into groups.
Vocabulary	4	She uses a range of words  and phrases that are mostly grammatically correct.
Sentence Structure	5	She can write a variety of sentences.
Punctuation	5	She can use the correct sentence in punctuation.
Spelling	5	She spelt all her words correctly.
Total	32	4p